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Reddit mentions of Corruption (The Corruption Cycle Book 1)
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Reddit mentions: 2
We found 2 Reddit mentions of Corruption (The Corruption Cycle Book 1). Here are the top ones.
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Not sure if you're interested in self-published work, but you might dig my book Corruption. It's a horror/portal fantasy set in Eastern Europe with giant lice, sexual curses, vodka-guzzling wights, and a solar apocalypse. If that sounds up your alley, give it a shot! If not, then I'd say start with the classics - you really cannot go wrong with The Master and Margarita.
Edit: found a typo and thought of another one - Gene Wolfe's The Land Across was great, too, albeit not an easy read.
I might be the only one having trouble, but it took a minute to find the book to review the blurb, so here's a link for anyone else who wanted to take a look: https://smile.amazon.com/Corruption-Cycle-Book-1-ebook/dp/B06Y5WYS1Y/ref=sr_1_1?s=books&ie=UTF8&qid=1496947707&sr=1-1&keywords=corruption+by+adam+vine
Overall it looks pretty good to me. The cover art is eye catching. The blurb looks like a solid length - not so short you don't get any meat and not so long that you feel like you're reading chapter 1. You do get the strong sense from the blurb that it's a dark story (which it is from what you said, so that's good). I do not get the Wizard of Oz sense from it whatsoever.
Suggestions (and these may be hyper critical, but you were asking for thoughts!):
The first line seems choppy to me just in the "was champion" part. Maybe consider "Daniel Harper was a champion until" or "Daniel Harper was the champion until" or "Daniel Harper was the reigning champion until". I'm not sure you need the comma in that first line either.
On the topic of punctuation, I think the second paragraph is a little overwhelming in the punctuation category. Even when used properly, it seems choppy to me to have a full colon followed by a semi colon. Maybe think about restructuring that paragraph? Or maybe just get rid of the semi colon? I think the sentence would be correct without it.
I guess my suggestions boil down to working on the flow rather than the content.
Good luck! Hope my comments were helpful rather than annoying!