Reddit mentions of Vanedo Beauty Friends Sheet Mask from Korea (12pc set)

I agree with /u/rorowhat in that the brands need some work. People aren't going to order a basket for things they can easily buy right now. Adding in some products people may not know of like these body scrubbers (which are absolutely amazing, and work 100% better than a loofah) would be a good idea. Also more artisanal soaps/lotions. The type of people who are buying this basket won't care if it adds $5-8 if they get cooler stuff they otherwise wouldn't have learned about. Additionally, it may be a good idea to have baskets with a certain focus-- hair/body/face etc. I'm finicky about shampoos and body washes, as many people are, so I'd be more likely to buy a box with things like: lip balm, hand lotion, cuticle cream, nail file, sheet mask than the box you have. Or if you want to stay more cleanliness oriented even: floss, motorized tooth brush (you can send replacement heads for repeat customers rather than traditional tooth brushes), mouth wash, hand soap, artisanal bar soap, scrubber, poo pourri, etc.
I'd caution you on using shampoo/deodorant as a staple, because a lot of the time they depend on the person's body.

You had some grammatical errors in the "about us" tab, which I'm cleaning up. I work as an editor for a few of my Uni's publications, and the About Us really stood out to me. I strongly urge you to tidy some of the errors, as they seem unprofessional. I'm also rewording some redundancies and taking out info I think is crimping your style.

Idk your target demo, but from a perspective of a broke college student who has to pay all her own bills: I can't afford $30 for someone to ship me toothpaste and whatnot. No, it's not cheaper for me to pay you $30 when 80% of the products in the basket I don't have any use for. The broke college kid in me would not use this service. It seems like your target market needs to be 25-45-somethings (mom's of college students would probably love to send this as a care package to their kids). You're targeting people with extra cash, who will want to try new soaps, lotions, body scrubs, etc. As such, I removed all talk of your age/your friends' opinions. Your age doesn't matter. Your friends don't matter. Your client matters. You need to relate to them as much as possible.

Here is a retouched version with what I think is a stronger about-me. I don't mean to step on your toes or anything, but since that section sounded a bit eh to me, it's what I focused on:

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Like many concepts, HYGEIA CLUB was born out of a desire for convenience. Founder Paul Parker brainstormed various hygienic issues with his friends and coworkers, and found that the biggest issues most people had were running out of product. Who really wants brave the store on a Saturday for toothpaste? There had to be a way to never run out of floss that doesn't constitute purchasing a 42 pack; HYGEIA CLUB was born.

We automatically deliver a care package, filled with essential toiletries, right to your door. Never again will you worry about running out of hand soap or fresh toothbrushes. What's more, we're still less expensive than what you can pick up at your local store, including delivery. Simple enough, right? We think so too.

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If you want to keep your working and fix the errors, here that is:

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Like many concepts, HYGEIA CLUB was born out of necessity. Founder Paul Parker began discussing his various hygienic issues with other college colleagues, ^ which ranged ^ [[[colons do not go here]]] from running low on toothpaste (and never wanting to run to the store just for that one item) to never quite knowing when to replace his toothbrush. [[[ Paul's colleagues, ranging from freshman to senior level, Everyone agreed to having these situations and with such the idea for HYGEIA CLUB was born.]]] this whole sentence doesn't make sense, and you've already used some form of "range"

For a very low cost, we automatically deliver a care package filled with essential toiletries right to your door so that you never have to worry about running out. What's more, even delivered^,^ we're still less expensive than what you can pick up at your local store, saving both time and money. Simple enough, right? We think so too.

Too awesome, congrats girl!! One of my hubby's best friends brings us lottery tickets every time he comes over, but i've never won more than $5! Thanks for sharing your winnings :) I would love this face mask set!
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